2011年大学英语六级考前热点高分范文(01)

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   Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic Employment Pressure Facing College Students. You should write at least 150 words, and base your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below:
  1)目前大学生面临就业难的问题
  2)分析导致该问题的原因
  3)大学生应该如何应对该问题
  Employment Pressure Facing College Students ________________________________________________
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  本题属于提纲式文字命题。提纲第1点提出一个问题,提纲第2点要求分析该问题产生的原因,提纲第3的要求说明应该如何解决该问题,由此可判断本文应为问题解决型作文。
  根据所给提纲,本文应包含如下内容:指出大学生就业难的问题;分析导致该问题的原因;从大学生的角度说明应该如何应对该问题。
  高分范文
  Employment Pressure Facing College Students
  [1]About a decade ago, university students could find satisfactory and enviable jobs after their graduation. [1]But now, things are different. Today’s university students usually experience great difficulties finding satisfactory jobs. They often complain that graduation means joblessness. [2]What is the cause of this phenomenon?
  [3]Firstly, with the enrollment extension of universities, [4]the supply of university graduates exceeds social demand. This results in a decreased chance for any individual graduate to find a job. [3]Secondly, university students [5]tend to spend most of their time at school in studying academic subjects and lack relevant job experience. [3]Thirdly, some students don’t study hard during the college. After four years of university life, they haven’t gained the knowledge those fairly good jobs or positions require.
  [6]Facing the increasingly fierce competition, we university students should try our bests to change this situation. [3]Above all, when in school, we should make the most of our time and [7]put our heart into our studies. [3]What’s more, we can take part-time jobs and attend social activities in our spare time to [8]accumulate relevant practical experience. [3]Besides, when we apply for jobs after graduation, we should [9]attach more importance to accumulating experience than to the starting salary.
  【亮点点评】
  [1]过去和现在进行对比。
  [2]设问句引出原因,容易引起注意。
  [3]过渡衔接词语,使文章条理清晰、衔接紧密。
  [4]“大学生供过于求”。
  [5]“倾向,趋于”。
  [6]“面对日趋激烈的竞争”,现在分词作状语。
  [7]“用心学习”。
  [8]“积累相关的实际经验”。
  [9]“更加关注”。
  佳句临摹
  1.佳句:Facing the increasingly fierce competition, university students should try their best to change this situation.
  临摹:经历过艰苦,我们就会更懂得如何应对危机。
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  2.佳句:They should attach more importance to accumulating experience than to their starting salary
  临摹:很显然,我们应该更加关注一个人的能力,而不是他的学历。
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  【KEY】
  1. Having experienced hardships, we will know better how to survive crisis.
  2. Obviously, we should attach more importance to one’s abilities than to his degree.
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